Throughout many storylines there are figurative meanings that can be symbolic through a object or event. In the story of “say you’re one of them, written by Uwem Akpan the author symbolize Mama’s dress as trickery. Mama’s littery dress to make us think that it’s fancy and expensive so in that way her younger children Monique and her brother Jean thinks that their parents going on date for a while. Mama’s glittery dress represent when it is dirty that she’d been wrestling on the ground all night and she smells of sweat. Mama knew that what was going on and she aware that they will be looking her next. This is very hard for Monique to understand what was going on but, she think that her mother was looking nice so, everything will be fine as usual.
The roof of the house is example of the Tutsi population, because they dying so many each and every day. The ceiling almost will collapse is she put two more. “I cry with the ceiling people until my voice cracks and my tongue dry up.” Pgs(351) the quote represent metaphor she cries along the dead because no one can ever call her Shenge again. Also she will be silently crying with them as well.
TOPIC SENTENCE: 1 point
ReplyDelete1(A) = The topic sentence restates the question and makes the writer's position clear. It immediately engages the reader and does so in an original, creative way. The topic sentence is thought-provoking for the reader.
SUPPORTING DETAILS: 2 points
1.6 (B) The writer chooses vivid details and examples from the reading or real life. The support shows, explains or proves the writer's position while engaging the reader. The reader feels confident in the writer's argument.
ORGANIZATION & UNITY: 1 point
1(A) = The paragraph sticks to the topic. The writer avoids repetition or redundancy. The paragraph is organized in a logical, efficient manner.
CONCLUSION: 1 point
.8 (B) = The conclusion recaps the topic sentence and summarizes the evidence, without repeating it word-for-word. It satisfies the reader's curiosity about the topic and allows her to answer the "so what?" question.
TOTAL = Add the scores from each section together.4.4
I really like her writhing and the way she started the paragraph. I'm pretty sure she can do much better than this one.
Paragraph 2 --
TOPIC SENTENCE: 1 point
.8 (B) = The topic sentence restates the question and makes the writer's position clear. It engages the reader.
SUPPORTING DETAILS: 2 points
2(A) The writer chooses unexpected details and examples from the reading or real life. The support shows, explains or proves the writer's position without a doubt. The reader is left feeling persuaded by the details and examples.
ORGANIZATION & UNITY: 1 point
1(A) = The paragraph sticks to the topic. The writer avoids repetition or redundancy. The paragraph is organized in a logical, efficient manner.
CONCLUSION: 1 point
1(A) = The conclusion recaps the topic sentence and summarizes the evidence, without repeating it word-for-word. It leaves the reader with a new, interesting idea about the topic or increases her desire to learn more about it, while leaving her able to answer the "so what?" question.
TOTAL = Add the scores from each section together.3.8
*Look at the blogroll on the right. Choose the name below yours on the blogroll. You will review that classmate's response #1. Copy and paste the above rubric into a MS Word document. Score your classmate's response. For each section, give one suggestion for improvement. Then fill in the following statements about your classmate's work:
The best part about these paragraphs is ....'' the roof of the house is a example of the tutsi population"
These paragraphs could be improved if the writer .... write a little more